- MIND NIGHT BLUE : 1st Night with a Bampire
- L.B Harpdog
- December 7, 2021
- MIND NIGHT BLUE
This book falls into the alright category. The character interactions are in need of some revisions. The book as a whole seems to be lacking in the editing department, with spelling mistakes, strange wording, as well as grammar and punctuation issues abound. The biggest issue and the hardest part to get past is the dialogue. It’s janky and awkward. As is the formatting, making it difficult to tell who is speaking or when one scene shifts to another perspective.
The lore is alright but needs some work. It’s hardly compelling and I often had trouble telling when this story was supposed to be set. One “Bampire” is constantly referred to as “The Attacker”, long after the scene where she attacked anybody was referenced. She attacked people once, so is she to be referred to as “The Attacker” for the rest of her life? This is what I mean when I say the dialogue is janky. Maybe refer to her for a scene or two, but the entire book is full of dialogue such as this.
While I think the listen-along portions were creative, I’m not one for musing in general, so I just ignored those. I did find the image of a bracelet with a for sale link under it to be a bit tacky though. At least put it in the back of the book with the other promotional stuff.
For the most part, the best part of the book is the sex. That seems to be where the majority of the effort was put in, while the plot is just the driving force to get from one sex scene to the next. I say for the most part because it’s often difficult to take seriously. When dicks are referred to as everything from Snakes, to popsicles, sausage, etc, etc., it gets kinda silly.
The idea is there, it’s a good idea, it just seriously needs a good editor.
Note: This copy was provided to me free of charge as a physical review copy. The opinions stated in this review are mine and mine alone, I was not paid or requested to give this book a certain rating, suggestion, or approval.